Disturbance 1


As I kiss you ,

I see you burn up and turn into smoke ,

now that I miss you ,

for you are just a hope .....

Comments

  1. KPAugust 9, 2011 at 2:12 PM

    Very nice and touching.. however.. it is "your" or "you are" in the last line.. it looks more like "you are..

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  2. SourabhAugust 9, 2011 at 2:58 PM

    he he..yeah i was wrong..never realised my english was tat bad...btw thanks KP...

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  3. KPAugust 9, 2011 at 9:23 PM

    Oh.. Sourabh.. its just typo error..! looks cute now..!

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  4. Sourabh K RaoAugust 11, 2011 at 8:31 PM

    hey thanks KP !!

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  5. Amit CharlesAugust 13, 2011 at 2:33 AM

    looks shallow yet the meaning is deep

    impressive

    keep it goin;)

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  6. Sourabh K RaoAugust 13, 2011 at 9:28 AM

    thanks a lot amit :)

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  7. Sujatha SathyaOctober 15, 2011 at 11:23 PM

    some strong pining there

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  8. Sourabh K RaoOctober 16, 2011 at 9:11 AM

    yeah quite strong

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